Descriptive Writing

Miss Bannan's writing group have been working on descriptive writing. This week we have been writing about lemons. We used wow words and our senses to describe what they were like to look at, touch, taste and smell. We also watched a buddy eat the lemon and watched their face to see their reaction. Taylor, Turanga, Ella-Pearl, Cole and Sophie wrote some amazing descriptions and got to read their stories out to Mr M, who was very impressed and gave them a gold sticker! 

Read some of our amazing descriptive writing below:

The room was filled with excitement and anticipation as the class stared at the object that looked like a yellow fruit and an L&P ice block. As I bit into the juicy, sour, stinging and a little bit transparent lemon my tastebuds were running away from the lemon because they didn't like it. My eyes crunched and scrunched up like a crunchy bar. It was extremely yellow and sour. When I looked at the skin, I saw some little gold freckles. It was really strong. - Ella-Pearl.

When Mrs Harris took the white bowl of who-knows-what out of the fridge I felt anxious. As I touched the lemon it froze my hand! My taste buds stung! It also tasted sour. Zara's eyes scrunched up and her hands flapped as she bit into the lemon. When I bit into the lemon I was disgusted. - Cole.

Have you ever eaten a whole lemon before? I have. It was yellow like the sun. It was squishy. It smelt amazing like lemon perfume. It was juicy. I loved the lemon. It was so loud when Mrs Harris brought the gleaming bowl out of the fridge. The room grew with anticipation. When we all bit into the lemon our faces crinkled with disgust. Our taste buds stung as we threw the lemon out. - Taylor.

The room buzzed with excitement. Everyone was so excited because Mrs Harris said we would have something to eat. Everyone was yelling. My ears blew up!! My ears didn't actually blow up. The inside of the lemon looked like mars. When Lucas bit into the lemon his eyes disappeared because the lemon was so sour. - Turanga.

As Mrs Harris pulled the shiny bowl out of the cold fridge I got excited! If I tell you it was sour, can you guess what it was? If you guessed a lemon you're right! There was a lemon in the bowl! WARNING! Never taste a thing that looks like a little yellow planet. The lemon gleamed in the shiny bowl. When Rylan ate the sour fruit his eyes scrunched up and his tongue poked out. - Sophie.

Fire

In Te Māuru-e-taki-nei we are talking about being Firewise.
This week we talked about how fire can be helpful for cooking, lighting, heating, celebrating and burning rubbish.
Here are a couple of stories.

Sherbet

Te Māuru-e-taki-nei were lucky enough to get the left over sherbet from our other Junior classes.  We had a tasting session before we decided to write about the experience.  We talked about how we would describe sherbet to someone who had never tried it before.
Here are a few pieces of writing...

Sherbet tastes like popping candy dancing on your tongue as you eat it.  It also tastes like sour strawberries that make you make a funny face whenever you eat it.  Sherbet looks like crushed pink marshmallows.  Sherbet feels like crushed pink marshmallows.  Sherbet feels like soft baking flour.  Sherbet sounds like popping in your mouth.  Sherbet smells like strawberry milk shake.  When I saw the sherbet I was so excited to taste it and when I tasted it it was delicious.
By Tyler

Hi Louie
You don't know me but I am talking about sherbet.  It tastes like sour lollies and sherbet looks like crushed snow.  Louie the sherbet it also tastes awesome.  Louie the sherbet sounds like wrapping paper inside my mouth.  My taste buds almost exploded.  Sherbet smelt sweet.  Louie I felt happy to taste sherbet.
From Cole

Yesterday we tried sherbet.  It was incredible.  It was pink.  It looked like candyfloss.  It was sweet.  When I saw it I loved it.  I wished Louie tried it.  He would of said "Oh yeah!"  Phoebe liked it.  It made my face turn red.  It was sugary.  I mean sour.  I saw red bits.  I think it was it sweet.  I wonder if there is a lot of sugar.  It looks like mished marshmallow.  I was tempted to eat it.  I just liked it.  There was a lot of mess where I ate it.  I liked it.  It tastes like popping candy.  I was excited when Mrs Dickson said I have a surprise.  Then she told us.
By Elsie